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Originally Posted by TagumonYatsuray

Hey everyone! I've finally found motivation to try working on my writing again, and I've encountered an issue with my scene-pacing style/format.

It feels to me as if the gaps-in-time; or the 'jumps between locations' are either too frequent or too sudden or just strange/out-of-place in general...

I've included an EXCERPT from my story here; since actually 'Showing' the problem is probably way more effective than just asking for advice on something no-one can see.

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Yes, it's April and there's still some time until summer, but there are people talking about Halloween on March, so who cares? The thing is that I couldn't sleep well last night, so I had a look at random FGO videos on Youtube. At 2AM or so I was watching for the 1,000,000th time a video about Berserk Nobbu's attacks and NP when I noticed that there was a pattern in both summer events. Here it is:

1. God(-tier) organizer: The one to start all the stuff, and the free 4* we get

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And now I can! Sorta.

bored while I wait for Anastasia.

1. Ciel's trump card is the Seventh Scripture.
2. The Burial Agency has seven members. (plus one reserve)
3. Seven Masters and Servants are chosen for the Holy Grail War.
4. It takes seven Guardians to restrain Primate Murder.
5. "Thou seven heavens clad in the three great words of power / come forth from the Ring of Deterrence, o guardian of the balance!"
6. Tohno Shiki is from the Nanaya (七夜) clan and his knife's name is

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