The 2014 Extra Grail Fanfiction Challenge War of...Greatness, or something. 1/2
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, February 4th, 2015 at 07:28 PM (4589 Views)
Before writing anything first I would like to thank the judges for using their free-time and being good enough to read through and comment on all the stories that were entered in. Even Leo who got banned halfway and especially to Jor who got very sick in the middle of it. Either way thank you very much for making this possible. And congratulations to everyone who won I am sure it was well deserved.
Now it’s pretty obvious but my entry was Breakdown. It did pretty badly, but thinking about it now I don’t feel much attachment to it since like a week after I submitted it that Strange Fake trailer came out and I was “welp, out the door that plot goes.” Haven’t actually thought about it since then but re-reading my notes and the comments I felt it was appropriate to at least flesh out what I was thinking and set up the skeleton of what it was supposed to be.
So the thing I learned from this contest was, I need to get a beta. For anything, and everything, I need to get a beta and that is exactly what I am going to do for any future projects. Happened with Lorelei, happened with this, need a beta.
Okay so the biggest problem looking back was In Media Res and it took all the judges saying that to make me realize that. In fact when I planned it out before this contest the first scene was supposed to be Luvia fighting a Somalian pirate. But then remembering BL’s aversion to OCs, out the door that went and I decided to go Apo. Yeah, I was surprised no one caught that. The organization is a rip from the organization of the prologue in Apo. We have ambiguous setting with two people talking, climatic battle with climatic stuff, and first person account of approaching threat.
And the whole problem with powerlevels can be explained because of In Media Res. Zouken’s had two weeks draining the Ryuudouji leyline. He’s also putting everything on the line so he’s more like Hero!Zouken and Acht’s using the power of an army of homunculi maids that he brought. Which is something Megas talked about. And Zouken’s illusion thing was a plot point earlier. So yeah In Media Res really sucked.
As for the whole Prisma thing. That was the big clue. I was actually doing the Prisma Status Sheets when the contest started. And yeah I brain-farted and believed it was canon. It was like during the stream for the UBW anime announcement where they should prisma stuff I was like “ohhh yeahh this isn’t canon, oh well.”
I was pretty sad that no one thought the magecraft was impressive. Tohsaka concept jewels? Zouken using his absorption attribute on himself to fuel more absorption spells? Zouken absorption insects? Yeah Acht was lame, but Acht’s supposed to be lame.
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Anyway enough on that stuff. Since I’ve thrown this to the wind this is the concept and everything for the story.
So it’s after Fate Route and set directly after Shirou and Luvia solve the Van Fem casino thing which was actually Rin’s job but they ended up having to save her. Since it was a favor for Waver, Rin finally strong-arms him into appealing to the Association to dismantle the Grail. They send Forte and some guy to do it, where they encounter Zouken who is against this because he doesn’t want to die and still wants to be immortal. There’s a tussle and Zouken gets owned but he manages to activate the reserve system (what were you thinking? Yeah at this time I totally forgot the reserve system was only Apo). However since Fuyuki’s leyline had been depleted ten years earlier cos of the 5th and Fuyuki isn’t as great as Trifas, it’s going to take a few weeks to distribute Command Spells and allow for Servants to be summonable. At the same time this will render Fuyuki impotent as a spiritual land.
The Association has a problem now. There have people who want to use the Grail but the Association doesn’t want to lose face, as well as lose land holdings, so they decide to send a team to move the Grail out of Tohsaka land and hold the War somewhere else. Waver and Rin don’t agree with this so Waver collects his own team and they head to Fuyuki to dismantle the Grail.
And basically have a magi war over the Grail without Servants.
As for the thing with Prisma and Zelretch. Zelretch owes Waver from Prisma-land because of the Card thing, so to pay his debt he promises Waver he’s going to get rid of the Prisma Grail, but he owes other Waver as well so as a “kill two birds with one stone,” thing he’s going to help both of them. He plays no role in the story until the very end but he’s an essential part of the Waver faction’s plan to destroy the Grail.
Here Tohsaka finished that Mini Jewel Sword pendent in HA which serves as a receiver and transmitter for signals across parallel worlds, kind of like a radio. She’s meant to stick it into the Greater Grail to let Zelretch know what to transfer into the Prisma world and that’s meant to destroy both Grails because it’s be a Grail collapsing on another Grail. As seem Ilya is there to help because Zelretch is too weak for something like that.
The Association’s plan was to steal the Zelretch box and shove the Grail inside of that because you’re supposed to be able to fit most things in the Zelretch box so why not a giant monolith.
Either way the war revolves around these two objects as well as Ryuudouji temple as place.
Characters
Association
Acht:
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Ilsa von Einzbern
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Zouken
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Forte
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Sakura
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Luviagelita Edelfelt
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Silvertongue
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Bai Zheng Yu
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Enda
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