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Training Phase #8

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I wrote this in the span of an hour or so, no proofreading (again).
I'm focused on writing my short story for now, so I'll do this training and read some basic guides on the short stories (maybe even read some, since I have enough time )

This is madness! This is insanity! The whole situation is just bizarre, and now I'm supposed to face my biggest fear, and I've got Mike to blame!
It was another yet another dull, misty evening in the lake of Anraka, where me and Mike were roaming around the lake with his boat, looking for nothing but excitement. Well, his excitement, he knows how terrified I am from water, since the accident he caused to me back in the day, where he threw me off his boat, and I drowned but thanks to his father, I was saved.

The lake was as voiceless as ever, with only our paddles making it talk. Mike decided that he's insane enough to ramble deeper inside the lake, despite all the warnings of the villagers, but I guess the word 'sanity' doesn't ring a bell to him, and all my desperate pleadings for him hadn't yielded any results. I should've listened to Aaron's advice and just cut this anchor loose.

I wonder why he always pesters me..why am I even his friend, anyway?!! I've gained absolutely nothing from this so-called friendship. Aaron has always told me that he'll only drag me down, but I was too stupid to listen. I can't live alone. I've always tried to surround myself with people, and my circle was Mike, Aaron and Claudia. Aaron and Mike have never seen eye to eye, and he would always warn me about his mischievous nature.
"Cut this loser loose, you're too good to be around him" I still recall Aaron telling that to me in front of Mike. God knows how many devils were dancing in Mike's head, but he was so angry that I could've swore I've seen sparks from his eyes. Ever since that day, they've never talked again.

Mike and Aaron are what I can call a polar opposites. They're different in anything and everything. Aaron's considerate and courageous , while Mike is rash and cowardly. People would always depend on Aaron, and they would scratch off Mike from the list of the reliable youth. The only thing they could agree on, is that they despise each other to the point where they could never be in the same place together.

"Mike!" I break the silence of the speechless lake, hoping to get him back to his sense. "We need to get back, you know how dangerous this place is!" I resume pleading with all my might. Maybe he'll go back to his senses, just..maybe..
"We need to continue! We've sworn to do it" He annoyingly brushes off all my pleadings. You've sworn to do it!" my composure is washed away within these shores of fear, so I start yelling at him. "I'm sick and tired of you dragging me around, causing me only fear and pain." I can see his jaw dropping from what I'm saying. It's not normal to see me yell at someone, so he doesn't have words. "I always get dragged by you. I should've listened to everyone when they told me to cut you loose and find better friends." I deliver the final blow, with words that are only meant to hurt, paying back for every moment he caused me pain.

I wonder how much disruption did we cause for the animals in slumber, but silence is the only thing that's surrounding the place after the chaos was ensued. I can still see confusion in Mike's dark eyes, but I don't care, all I want is to come back to the village, and end this 'friendship', but my 'friend' has yet to respond.
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  1. ratstsrub's Avatar
    Well, his excitement, he knows how terrified I am from water, since the accident he caused to me back in the day, where he threw me off his boat, and I drowned but thanks to his father, I was saved.
    Best sentence construct ever 10/10 would read again. Especially loved how you separated all the parts for easy reading, a direct sentence, where the clauses are limited, for reasons of necessity or brevity, is very overrated, whereas slowly leading the readers, tediously teasing the tempo to throttle the timing, that is the best.

    Anyways, formatting wise, you're stuck between proper publishing format and internet blocking. That is, you have no indentation yet your quotes are not separated by newlines.